Z is for “Zori” #nanowrimo #fiction

“I dropped the phone and ran to the bathroom to throw up. When I had nothing left in me, I closed my eyes and lay my cheek against the cold bathroom floor where I lay for an eternity…”

It was impossible.

What the fuck was going on? 

I scrolled through all the photos a thousand times until my cell battery died. Then I pulled out my laptop like a crazy person, rushed into the kitchen and sat down at the table to try again. Maybe Meghan was right, maybe I did have some kind of alternate link to my cloud that was playing tricks on me…

But no, just like the first time, all of the photos I had taken with Galen were gone. There was no trace of him anywhere.


Where were the pictures of us at the Banyan Tree, near the wharf in Lahaina, Black Rock, the romantic bistrot and Mount Haleakala?

Photo credit: Foter.com

I scrolled back to my photos in Oahu, before Galen, and my heart stopped again. The selfie of Gran from Diamond Head and the one taken with Joshua and Jennifer at the Dole Plantation were also gone. I felt sick and my head began to pound. The kitchen walls were closing in and I suddenly found myself on the floor clutching my stomach.

Oh my God, Oh my God, Oh my God… What the hell was happening to me?

With my cell being dead, I rushed to find the number on my itinerary for the Maui condo. My heart raced as I picked up the landline to make the call.

“Aloha! Lahaina Mahalo Breeze Condo Resorts! How may I direct your call?” The front desk agent was cheery and perky.

“Uh, I need to reach Mr….I mean, Galen in Building 1 Unit 816.”

“Mahalo, one moment please.”

I held my breath and waited on hold. I waited, waited and waited. I was just considering hanging up and trying again when the front desk picked up again when a new and more official voice picked up.

“Aloha. May I help you?”

“Yes, I’d like to be connected to Unit 816 in Building 1.”

“Oh,” the voice quietly hesitated. “I’m sorry to inform you that…that resident, Mr. Galen, is no longer with us.”

I felt vomit bubble in the back of my throat.

“What do you mean that he is no longer with you? Since when?”

“I’m sorry to say that he passed away a little over a month ago.”

I froze. This had to be a prank.

“Is this some kind of joke? If it is, it’s in very bad taste!” I said, angrily.

I couldn’t catch my breath, my throat was constricting and my heart was pounding against my chest.

“I’m sorry Ma’am but it is no joke. I’m sorry to be the one tell you. From what we know from the authorities, it seems that Mr. Galen might have lost his footing at one of the lookout points off the main highway near to where his son drowned a few years ago. It was such sad news for all of us. He was with us for quite a few years and such a lovely man…”

I dropped the phone and ran to the bathroom to throw up. When I had nothing left in me, I closed my eyes, lay my cheek against the cold ceramic tile where I lay for what seemed like an eternity.

This isn’t happening…I must be going mad.

I managed to get myself back into bed where I curled up like a baby. My eyes focused on the new pair of sandals that sat next to my unpacked luggage across the room, sandals Galen had helped me pick out after I’d busted the strap on my old ones. I could almost hear his voice as clear as day echoing in the room.

“Those zoris look cuter on you! Sometimes a new pair is just what you need when you find yourself taking a new path.”

Photo credit: Moyan_Brenn via Foter.com / CC BY

Suddenly remembering that the only photo of Galen and I not uploaded was the very last one at the WikiWiki shuttle, I grabbed my cell in desperation.

When I saw Galen’s beautiful blue eyes staring back at me with his infectious smile, his cheek pressed tenderly against mine, I sighed in relief.

I no longer cared about all those other photos that had disappeared – I had this one and that was all that mattered to me…that is, until Galen’s lovely face slowly vanished from the screen, leaving me smiling all alone…

©2017 Marquessa Matthews.

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50 thoughts on “Z is for “Zori” #nanowrimo #fiction

    1. That means a lot coming from you S! I knew how I wanted it to end but scrambled every night for the past 2 weeks to think up stuff before bed!😥 Epilogue to write now and I’m taking a break to read everyone else and NOT write!😩

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  1. Oh my goodness, what a twist and beautifully orchestrated Marquessa. Great read and you kept me hooked in with each day’s posting. Looking forward to reading more from you in the times ahead. Well done on completing the challenge and entertaining us so well. 🙂 Linda

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  2. Well done, Marquessa. It takes some planning to do the posts this way but you nailed it. And kept them all interesting. I’m glad I followed you

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  3. Crickey! That was quite the ending – and totally unexpected. I’d almost accepted that it was all going to be an (unsatisfactory) happy-ever-after ending, or (stereotypical) man-done-me-wrong thing. Brilliant! Another brilliant bit of serialised story-telling, so inspired by this for next year!

    Bunny and the Bloke

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    1. As you may tell, I’m more of a cliffhanger writer than a HEA writer…this story was a challenge but happy to inspire!😙 Congrats on doing so well to you too!👍


  4. Wow! This story really took me for a spin. Sorry I kinda busted the ending, haha, but it was still a shock! Waiting patiently for the epilogue now. Btw I already subscribed to your mailing list, but if you were to sell this novella, I would totally buy it too!

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  5. I don’t mind Galen death but no pictures so Katie can remember him? Grieve him properly?

    What happened to those pictures that disappeared mysteriously?

    A great story Marquessa. Please take your time to read again. Well done!

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    1. Hi Booky. Galen died before Katie arrived in Maui. There are no pictures of him because he was in “spirit” only to help guide her through her journey. I will close the loop with Katie and Galen in the Epilogue. Thanks for reading!

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  6. OMG! YOU WENT PARANORMAL/SUPERNATURAL!!! Bwahahaha!!! I love it! Gotta tell you, Marquessa – I did not expect a “traditional” ending, especially after I pushed Kate into the vol-, er…I mean she slipped! 😀 😀 😀 I never saw this coming! Go, you! NICE! *Hearing the Twilight Zone theme* Looking forward to the novella so I can find out if everyone is dead or in the shower with Bobby Ewing! LMAO!

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  7. Oh wow such a shocking ending. She is sick but he’s the one who dies first. I still wonder what happened to all her photos with him. At least she had one. Great job with this. Thoughas always I wish for both of them, the ending was happier.

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    1. Galen died just before she arrived in Hawaii. Depending on your perspective/beliefs, she was spending time with his spirit or she is suffering from a break and imagined it all, the reason he is in no photos.

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  8. Shocking and I am heartbroken. I am the quintessential happy ever after woman; dang!! This is not fair and I didnt like it at all Marquessa – pls say your epilogue will have another shocker where it wasnt him but someone who looked like him who fell off or maybe he survived the fall by living in a cave and licking his wounds over a broken heart!!! Puhleeeeeeze!

    Theme: Peregrination Chronicles (travel)
    Z is for Zen in the Glen #atozchallenge

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    1. Lol! Did Galen really die around the same time she was arriving in Hawaii? Was everything after “Aloha” a dream or part of a psychotic break? Or maybe Galen was a spirit helping her through her trauma? We’ll see in the Epilogue…🤔

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